I'm sorry you felt the story wasn't well-received - I'm sure I left kudos but may not have commented, as I tend to not leave comments unless I can think of something more to say than "I liked this"

while I can be picky and bitchy about bad writing, I admit that I overlook stuff if the story really grabs me - and this one did. I remember it as being somewhat OTT, though that's often a feature of the magical realism genre; overall it left me with a very positive impression (and my friend Rachel also enjoyed it enough to want to reread it) - so if you do decide to go back and re-edit and post it again, I can guarantee you'll make at least the two of us happy (and it sounds like others as well).